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Marcos Avila · Moderators Joined: 05 Feb 2003 Location: Hiroshima (JP)

Final text moved to the Articles section:

http://www.aquahobby.com/articles/e_moral.php
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number6 · Moderators Joined: 07 Feb 2003 Location: Ontario, Canada

1st sentence: "from the moral point of view?" Should read from the P.o.V of morality. A moral point of view would be the opposite of an immoral point of view Wink

"mainly among radical conservatives" in the section Freedom and Happiness. Did you mean conservationists?

The last paragraph, when you skim over the subject of birds, seems sort of tossed in, like it's a given that birds don't belong in cages. I am not sure that this adds to the article, and almost seems to distract from the important message directly above. I agree with it, but for the article, it seems arbitrary. The last paragraph needs to somehow summarize the points above a little better without new data.

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Marcos Avila · Moderators Joined: 05 Feb 2003 Location: Hiroshima (JP)

Thanks D'Man! You were absolutely right about the last paragraph, there was certainly some reason why I mentioned the birds at the time when I made the original answer in the topic discussion, but here and now for this article it was out of place. I've made a few more changes today (in green) and I think the article is almost in its final form now...
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