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Tommy
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PostPosted: 2004.03.06(Sat)1:17    Post subject: [Done] New Tank Syndrome Reply with quote

Final text moved to the Articles section:

http://www.aquahobby.com/articles/e_syndrome.php

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Marcos Avila
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PostPosted: 2004.03.06(Sat)2:42    Post subject: Reply with quote

I really like it Tommy! Let's wait for others to chip in of course, but I think it's pretty much ready to go. The only possible improvement I might suggest is that in the first section you try to emphasize the fact that NTS is NOT unavoidable, it's a result of MISTAKES and loss of fish CAN be minimized or even totally avoided by understanding the concept of tank cycling and monitoring this process with the appropriate tests.
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PostPosted: 2004.03.06(Sat)10:01    Post subject: Reply with quote

Format is great! Overall a very nice article.

If you ever do an article on tank maintenance, then it could be a part 2 to this one.
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Tommy
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PostPosted: 2004.03.06(Sat)10:08    Post subject: Reply with quote

Great suggestion Marcos, thanks. I've worked it into the first section, second paragraph. I also went back through the entire article and made a few adjustments. Where you see Dark Blue color text is the part that I have edited since the original post.

Thanks Noname. I don't have any plans to write a sequel, but maybe that is a great idea to spur someone else here on the board to try their hand at writing?
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Matt Shandorf
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PostPosted: 2004.03.06(Sat)16:12    Post subject: Re: [Draft] New Tank Syndrome Reply with quote

Tommy, I think it's a great article - It must have taken you forever to write! It'll go well with Shawna's Fishless cycling article.

Sorry for being nitpicky, but I think there are two punctuation errors in the second paragraph.

Tommy wrote:


Welcome to the hobby, you are experiencing New Tank Syndrome or NTS. Though obviously not a scientifically classified malady, this is a very real condition that many new fish keepers find themselves experiencing...The loss of fish in a brand new tank, CAN be minimized or even totally avoided by understanding the concept of tank cycling and monitoring this process with the appropriate tests.-


In the first sentence, I would put either a semicolon or a dash between hobby
and you to separate those two independent clauses. Also, no comma is necessary between tank and CAN.

*Smacking myself for being anal*

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Tommy
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PostPosted: 2004.03.06(Sat)16:20    Post subject: Re: [Draft] New Tank Syndrome Reply with quote

Matt Shandorf wrote:
Sorry for being nitpicky, but I think there are two punctuation errors in the second paragraph.


Thanks Matt! You are NOT being nitpicky. That's what this is all about. I've been through it numerous times and I keep finding grammar errors too. Feel free to point out any others that you can find.
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PostPosted: 2004.03.08(Mon)22:28    Post subject: Reply with quote

Woohoo...I don't know how it was for you all but for me the process was great...it took me like 10 minutes to get the article up after I saw it [Ready] Smile
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